Ronald returned home and began to weave stories from The Rocky Horror Picture Show into Doris' script.
The Jewish girl Doris is shy by nature. Her mother is a strong mother who has to control her in all aspects. Even when she went to an art high school for an interview, her mother took her there.
Doris, who had no self-confidence, could not break through her own psychological barriers and perform in front of everyone, although her singing voice was moving.
It wasn't until Ralph Garcia, a Latino student in the acting class, invited her to see the movie The Rocky Horror Picture Show that Doris discovered that many members of The Rocky Horror Picture Show club had not received any professional vocal training.
But they had the courage to show themselves, rushed to the stage, started singing, and achieved very good results. Many audiences below were applauding.
Doris took off her coat, rushed on stage to sing with them, and finally broke through her own psychological barrier.
Ronald pulled off the letter paper from the typewriter and read it aloud. It seemed to be a bit blocked.
It seems that it is not easy for singers to have psychological obstacles, but there are more obstacles to performing in public. And during the interview for admission, a shy actor can still be judged by his appearance and body shape. How can a singer be admitted if he cannot sing?
Besides, for this part, I have to ask Jean and Antonia to write life scenes into the script. Ronald is very cautious now, especially since they are already actors in the group.
As for Lucy's metaphor, she had already agreed to use it in the script.
It can be put into the scene where Hilary and Coco are jealous of Leroy and have an argument during dance practice.
Hillary: "I love his black butt. (To Leroy)"
coco: "Go to other places to pry men, Leroy already has a master."
Hillary: "Don't be so confident, my dear."
coco: "I'm not your dear, fuck my dear (fuck my dear)
Hillary: "Thank you, you're welcome." (looking at Leroy with a pun).
coco: "No way, Leroy doesn't like white girls."
Hillary: "It would be nice to change the taste occasionally and not eat blackberries."
coco: "The darker the blackberries, the sweeter the juice, sweetheart."
Hillary: "That's good, but who wants diabetes?"
"How on earth did you come up with this girl bickering dialogue, Ronnie?"
Director Alan Parker saw this section and was full of praise, "If you ask me, you are a genius at writing dialogue."
"Ah? I didn't come up with it. I heard what others told me, and I moved it here and put it together again."
"What about the ending of Doris? Why didn't we see the passage where Doris breaks through obstacles and sings bravely?" Alan Parker is still more concerned about Doris' plot.
"To be honest, I'm running into some logistical obstacles, Director Parker. I'm still trying."
"Okay, use more snacks."
Ronald ran to producer Da Silva again and said, "Mr. Da Silva, there is something wrong with 'Hot Lunch'. Someone took the picture..."
"I have said many times, let professionals take care of professional matters. Ronald, you don't understand film distribution. Don't show off your poor knowledge anymore."
Irene Kara successfully took over, which made the producer very satisfied. Ronald felt that the other party was not as patient with him as before.
"Well, maybe he is right. Let the professionals in charge of distribution consider it. I just accidentally made a distribution business. I don't know how the box office will be and whether I can get a share of it."
After Alan Parker got the girl's dialogue written by Ronald, he immediately asked his assistant to make dozens of copies on blue colored paper to replace the white paper in the original script.
This is a rule for British filmmaking. If you want to revise a finalized script, you will take away the page numbers that need to be revised on the original white copy paper, then change to a different color of copy paper, and replace the revised page numbers with
Go in.
In this way, the actors can clearly see where changes have been made and lines need to be recited. It is also more convenient for the staff on the set to manage, because the director may be on the set at any time to temporarily modify the script. This way, it is marked with different colors so that the version will not be messed up.
Ronald is writing more and more characters, including Gene's story, Hillary's story, and Coco's story. The key plots of the characters modified by Ronald account for just over one-third of the entire protagonist.
.If you add in the complete story of Doris that has not yet been revised, it would be close to half.
Not to mention that what Ronald changed were all key plots, plots that changed the characters, and subsequent endings of the characters.
The script with the latest version of the dialogue replaced will be sent to the hands of each actor and assistant director. The smell of the copy machine has not yet been eliminated, and the marks of rebinding are clearly visible. One by one, the scripts are sent to the hands of the actors by the assistant.
"Antonia, this is yours."
"Jean, this is yours."
"Antonia, what does it say above? Have my lines been changed?"
"Pfft..." Antonia couldn't help laughing when she saw the dialogue written by Ronald about two women competing for a man.
She pointed to the revised part and explained it to Jean. Jean took a pen and marked the phonetic notes that only he knew under the words he didn't know.
"Hahaha, do you girls really talk like this?" Gene asked with a smile.
"Absolutely. Several rich girls in my class all speak in the same tone."
Antonia thought about the "Hillaries" in the ballet class and burst out laughing again. Ronald's words were so insulting and made the faces of these characters very real.
Ronald walked into the rehearsal room and started handing out Cokes.
"Brother, your line is really great. I don't want to get diabetes. Hahaha, it made me laugh." Gene ran and handed the script to Ronald, "How did you come up with it, man?"
"I'm just taking what I heard and reassembling it."
Ronald smiled and picked up the script and turned it over casually.
As the scripts continue to come out, many papers have turned blue, and some are pink. The pink papers indicate that this part has been revised twice.
Ronald closed the script, and this was the origin of the movie. All scenes, shots, characters, dialogues, and actions were all marked in the script. The images and sounds finally presented on the screen were all from this thick book.
Based on the script.
Through the joint action of the director and actors, the text was captured by the camera lens, and the light fell on the film, causing some wonderful chemical reactions. Finally, it interacted with the silver powder, leaving beautiful dynamic pictures.
The cover of the script is slightly thick yellow cardboard, with a big "hot lunch" on the top and the title of the film written in small letters below.
In the lower right corner are a few lines of small print: "The contents of this script are confidential to the crew, and the copyright belongs to MGM Pictures. They may not be reproduced without permission."
In the middle are the words "final draft", and next to it is the name of the playwright according to the marking format.
Original screenplay: Christopher Gore.
and Luo...
"No, there is no reconciliation. Why is there no my name in the signature column?"
"Why is there no my name in the signature line?"
Ronald put the script on the table, pointed to the cover and asked director Parker.
"It's none of my business, Ronald. You can ask David."
“Have you got inspiration for your Doris script yet?”
"I'm still thinking, director, I've encountered some difficulties and I'm trying to figure out how to get around them."
Ronald went back to producer David da Silva.
"Why doesn't my name appear in the byline of the script? Mr. da Silva?"
Ronald asked the producer, pointing to the signature spot on the cover.
"I remember you didn't sign a screenwriting contract with us, right? Revisions are one thing, but signing is another. Allen also revised a lot of the script, and he didn't sign it either."
"But I had a verbal agreement with the director Mr. Parker. He promised me that if I wrote well, he would add my name to the screenwriter list."
"Then you have to confirm with Allen. Your signature is a very serious matter and the Writers Guild has to deal with it. You'd better ask Allen to give you a written confirmation." Producer Da Silva sent Ronald again.
Find a director.
"Mr. Director, Mr. Da Silva said that my signature must be confirmed by you before it can be put on the screenwriter column. You promised me at that time that as long as what I wrote was accepted, you would let me sign the script.
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"Yes, yes, I promised. This is probably just a typo, and they will correct it soon. I will ask my assistant to follow up on this matter, and you will be included in the next draft of the script."
"I'm very busy now, Ronald. You see, I have a lot to do with dance rehearsals and the following drama rehearsals. You'd better think more about how to write the plot of Doris? How to make her overcome her insecurities?
The shy person who dared to sing on stage became brave enough to perform in front of everyone."
Performance? Your performance was not very good. Ronald's heart gradually became cold.
The cover of the script says "final draft". After the final draft, Ronald's modifications were all replaced with colored cardboard. The previous modifications were simply a new set of copies.
This means that there is no next draft.
Based on Ronald's experience on the "Rock High School" crew, the production company will distribute the final list of the film to various industry unions. The cast list will be sent to the Screen Actors Guild. Actors with salary payment records can get a Screen Actors Guild card.
The list of directors is sent to the Directors Guild, and those who meet the requirements will be invited to join.
If the Writers Guild is the same, then it is this final draft that is sent to the union. Without him on the list of screenwriters, it is impossible for him to enter the Writers Guild with the script of this movie.
This makes no sense. In Rock High School, there are two screenwriters' signatures on the cover of the script. This shows that the Writers Guild does not require a movie to have only one screenwriter's signature like the Directors Guild does.
This doesn't make sense, why can't I add my own name?
"Mr. Parker, you may not know that I have worked on a Hollywood film crew before, and this is already the final version of the script. Why don't you add my name to the screenplay?