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Let’s talk about today’s revision progress, chapters 101-130.
Let’s talk about what was modified today.
The first modified content is that Li Dongze intercepted and killed the ghost transfer student from Laojun Mountain. In the original text, Li Dongze took many people to City No. 7.
But now looking back at the previous content, this is unrealistic, so it was changed to him going there alone.
The second modification is Lin Xiaoxiao’s introduction to Chen Jiazhang and Wang Xiaojiushi’s remarks, which are not important.
To sum up these two characters, the writing is actually very poor.
Chen Jiazhang failed to describe the characteristics of this character. He used pen and ink, but not in practice, so this character appears to be very useless.
It must be modified in the future.
The third modification is to delete the scene of study committee member Yu Junyi.
In the original text, he also entered Prison No. 18 as a time traveler, and then confirmed Liu Dezhu's identity as the 'big boss'.
In fact, there is not much need for this character, so without changing the character, some scenes were deleted and made more pedestrian.
This is also one of my main core goals in this revision: to eliminate some unnecessary things and refine some main characters.
The fourth modification is the first encounter between Qin Yiyi and Qingchen.
In the original text, Qin Yi's facial expression is a bit abnormal, so in this revision, I would like her to be more normal.
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In the future, we need to add some more scenes for her.
This character was also one of my regrets when I was writing the original text. She should have been given more roles and more words at that time.
However, during the serialization process, she was gradually removed from view, causing many subsequent plots to fail.
This is a bit similar to when I wrote about He Jinqiu. Some of the stories in the middle were not written, which caused a misunderstanding between the author and book friends.
The fifth modification is that I found a sentence at the end of Chapter 114: No supporting characters will die in this book. This sentence was deleted.
Let’s talk about some new creative directions and some regrets.
First of all, the second round of the shadow battle in City 18 was a bit anticlimactic.
The mission of the shadows is to unite the people of the Li family and then establish a connection between the Qing family and the Li family.
In the original setting, it was supposed that after Qingchen became the Imperial Master, he led Li Shu and others to beat up the shadow candidates first, but as a result, the plot ended too early.
The sequelae of this is that the shadow war seems less interesting, and there are too few bonds between Qingchen and Li Shu, the children of the Li family.
As a result, when Li Shi and Qing Chen broke up later, the scenes seemed too thin, and Li Shi didn't have any character.
Li Changqing was the only one who could barely stand.
Therefore, some new content will be added to this part in the future, including Li Shu, Li Yunshou, Li Changqing, and Lao Jiu (later renamed Lao Twenty-one).
In fact, Lao Jiu, who blocks the gun next to Li Changqing, should have had more scenes. In the setting, this person was the new bystander leader after Zheng Yuandong resigned, but in the end, I lost it in my writing.
Secondly, after Qingchen became the inspector of City No. 10, the struggle between the Parents' Association and the Mechanicus was a bit stalemate.
Originally used as a foreshadowing, the Mechanicum was supposed to be a stepping stone and a grindstone for the Parents' Association to gradually come onto the stage. However, as the writing went on, it naturally disappeared in this book.
This leads to the fact that there is a gap in the development of the parent-teacher association before Qingchen rectifies the lower third district, so it is very inappropriate.
