She came quietly and left again. She waved her hand and did not take Sun Quan with her, but only took away some luggage.
Before Yuan Shuiqing left, he stayed with Sun Quan for two days, leaving him with a wonderful experience. He finally truly owned her.
He was her first man, and he greedily hoped that he would be not only the first, but also the last.
To celebrate this event, he cooked himself, braised an elbow and drank two bottles of beer.
He didn't expect that Yuan Shuiqing would give him such a gift before she left. When she came back from her self-driving trip at the beginning of the month, she asked him to wait for her birthday this year. Unexpectedly, she suddenly changed her plan... This woman who goes back on her word!
Of course, he likes her going back on her word this time and having her own personality! He appreciates it.
The reason she gave was: "I might not be able to come back in time for my birthday, and it's not convenient for you to go to our school, so..."
So it's easier for him.
The only fly in the ointment is that as soon as he had a taste of it, she went back to the University of Science and Technology to attend the graduation ceremony, and the return date was uncertain. Sun Quan could only persuade himself in his heart to be content and contentment.
On the morning of July 2, the day after she left.
After Sun Quan got up, washed up, and filled his stomach, he went up to the second floor, turned on his computer, made himself a cup of tea, and prepared to officially start writing the text of "The Ring of the Immortal Dragon."
He had prepared the outline and the detailed outline of the first volume. He already knew how to write the beginning of this story, but he was still a little nervous when he was actually preparing to write it.
The story background, character settings, training system, exercises, pills, etc. are all set up, and the main line of the story is also clearly laid out. But with my current writing skills, I can really write the feeling I want.
?
As a professional writer who relies on words for a living, he has certainly thought about what good writing is more than once. How to judge the strength of a writer's writing?
At the beginning, he thought that writing was the kind that could produce gorgeous words that others could not write, and that would make people feel amazed at first sight. He had worked hard in that direction.
Then I slowly realized that I seemed to be on the wrong track. Maybe gorgeous words are suitable for poetry, for praising virtues, or for shameless advertising slogans. But for an online article that is known for its storytelling, gorgeous words are obviously not suitable.
What a plus.
In a modern society where the pace of life is getting faster and faster, how many readers have the patience to watch you write those gorgeous words with a strong flavour?
Story! Story! Story!
Say important things three times.
For an online article writer, the most important thing should be the story itself. Therefore, the writing style that an online article writer should pursue should not be gorgeous rhetoric. Moreover, there are often millions of words in the article, and you use gorgeous words throughout the article.
Let’s write it down in terms of vocabulary. You heifer, you can’t even stand on your head.
As time went by, Sun Quan gradually realized that for an online writer, the strongest writing style is to use the most concise words to describe the scenes, characters, dialogues, and everything else he wants to express.
Things are just like a painter's pen. Only those who can draw a thing with just a few strokes are awesome. Otherwise, it's all heresy!
However, many things are easier said than done.
He understood what good writing style should be like for an online writer, but when he actually did it and realized it, he found that it was so difficult to be paralyzed!
Sometimes, he compares his own writing style with that of great masters, and finds that the writing style of some of them does not make him feel inferior.
At that time, he had some confidence in his writing skills.
But sometimes, when he was writing, he suddenly found that he could not express what he wanted to express in an accurate sentence for a while, and he fell into doubt about his writing ability.
He himself also knew that his writing skills had improved a lot after years of stumbling on the streets, but the more he improved, the more weaknesses he discovered.
Therefore, he never had an accurate judgment about his writing power.
Now that he was about to officially start writing the text of "The Ring of the Immortal Dragon", he was once again worried about whether his writing power was enough?
enough?
Not enough?
That should be enough!
What if it’s not enough?
His eyes hesitated, but he didn't hesitate for too long. He thought it would be better to write it down and see! Anyway, he was not in a hurry to publish it. He wanted to write it down first and see the effect.
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Book Title: "The Ring of the Immortal Dragon"
Type: Fantasy
author:……
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After hesitating for a moment, Sun Quan wrote in the author column: The struggling salted fish.
Smiling, he skipped the already written introduction to the outline and started writing the first chapter directly.
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Chapter 1 Lin Erdan who loves to be in a daze
Countless torches illuminated the night, tightly surrounding Luanjian Hall under the night.
The sound of horse hooves, the sound of people, and the sound of swords being unsheathed woke up everyone in Luanjiantang who were sleeping soundly. They all jumped out with their swords in their clothes, shouting, asking, and yelling.
A dark horse walked slowly from the separated crowd of torches. Under the black cloak on the horse's back, an old and deep voice came: "Lin Bowen! Hand over the black dragon ring! Otherwise, the chickens and dogs will not be left!"
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Fire!
The entire Luanjian Hall has been ignited with raging fires, the flames are rising into the sky, and swords are waving in the night. The whole Luanjian Hall is being surrounded by countless men in black. Who is the head that suddenly flies over? The blood splashed on his face.
Still hot...
"father……"
He finally saw clearly the human head and face flying in the night sky. It was his biological father.
"kill!!!"
He mustered up his courage and swung his sword at the men in black around him. A dark spear suddenly flew from a distance and hit his vest. The tip of the spear penetrated his chest. All the strength in his body seemed to have suddenly retreated.
The tide was coming, and a long knife was slashing at him. He saw it, but he had no strength to dodge.
He saw the fire all over the sky, the swords waving, and the sudden rage of the cloaked man on the dark horse in the distance: "Who? Who asked you to kill Lin Bowen??"
The long knife swung by, and he felt his head flying. Finally, he saw the cloaked man suddenly flying up, flying dozens of feet, the broad sleeves of his robe swaying with vigor, and with one palm, he hit the black horse on the other black horse.
People were beaten to pieces...
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"ah……"
With a childish exclamation, in the dark room, a small body suddenly sat up, gasping for air with lingering fear, and a man and a woman asked questions beside him.
"Erdan? Erdan, are you having nightmares again? Don't be afraid, don't be afraid! Mother is here! Mother is here!"
"Alas! Erdan, you dreamed of digging out bird's nests and falling from the tree again, right? I told you not to dig out bird's nests or dig out bird's nests on weekdays, but you just didn't listen..."
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Sun Quan stopped writing and looked back twice at what he had just written. He did not start writing before the hero was killed for the first time. Instead, he chose the beginning of the story to be the seventh day after the hero Lin Bowen was killed.
Year.
At this time, Lin Bowen, under the influence of the Immortal Dragon Ring, had been reborn in a small mountain village. The siege and fighting in the night at the beginning of the text was the scene of Luanjian Hall being wiped out, but it was based on Lin Erdan's dream.
presented in a manner.
He chose to start the text this way for several reasons.
On the one hand, he knows that many readers today are very impatient and are afraid of abuse. The bitter and vendetta-style openings that were popular in martial arts novels in the past have long been outdated and are disliked by many readers.
Therefore, he could not choose to start writing when Luan Jian Tang was destroyed, or even before it was destroyed.
Because in that case, the beginning of this book will not be exciting at all, and it will torture the readers to death. In the first few chapters, the male protagonist will be killed all over the house. How many readers can endure it?
On the other hand, choosing to use Lin Erdan’s dream to present the tragedy of annihilation not only introduces the part where the family was annihilated through a short text, but also points out that the biggest murderer is an old master. At the same time,
When Lin Erdan wakes up from the dream, he can also bring out his current identity and his parents through a few words, and even indirectly convey a message to the readers through his father's words. Lin Erdan often has that nightmare, but
He usually explains the content of his nightmares to his current parents by "taking out bird eggs and falling them from the tree."
The third aspect is the issue of writing style!
The hero's experience of being wiped out is a heavy one, and readers are used to assuming the hero's identity. The opening chapter explains that Luan Jian Tang's family was wiped out and the hero was killed. Although it is to explain the background of the story and the need to stir up hatred, it must still be
It makes some readers feel uncomfortable.
This kind of writing style seems very depressing to Sun Quan, and readers with less psychological endurance will definitely be tempted to leave.
At this time, after Lin Erdan wakes up from his dream, his mother's concern and his father's words of "picking out bird eggs" can relax the depressing atmosphere at the beginning of the chapter, and even make some readers who are low in laughter smile knowingly.
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And this is the effect Sun Quan wants.
A heavy story should be mixed with some lighthearted and warm plots to dilute the heavy atmosphere. This is for the sake of the reader's reading experience.
This is probably one of the differences between online literature and traditional literature.
The writing style of traditional literature is too orthodox. When writing about a heavy plot, the author will even rack his brains to figure out how to describe the heavy and depressing atmosphere to the extreme, just to show his writing skills. After writing, the author himself
Maybe it's cool.
But are readers happy?
Have you considered the reading experience of your parents?
They basically won't consider it! So their parents vote with their feet and use their own choices to tell those authors that you are cruel! I don't have a kid like you!
But online article writers like Sun Quan are different. The better the commercial writer, the more they pay attention to the readers' reading experience. It doesn't matter whether you are happy or not, the important thing is to serve the readers well!
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The more Sun Quan wrote, the more immersed he became. After the short story about the family's destruction was presented in the form of Lin Erdan's dream, the rest of the plot was all about relaxed and warm daily life, Lin Erdan's daily life!
He tried his best to write as light and interesting as possible.bdshare();