Previously I saw that the Cuttlefish Master would make a summary every time he finished writing a volume. I thought it was very good.
On the one hand, you can analyze the gains and losses of this volume, and on the other hand, you can share your feelings and experiences with readers.
Internet writers often lack freshness in their manuscripts because they are written and published immediately.
Therefore, Internet writers are often insensitive to the problems in novels, and it is difficult to see them.
This is better for physical writers. After they finish writing the book, they can put it away for a while.
Leave it for a month, two months, or even half a year. When you read the novel again at this time, it will be full of strangeness and freshness, and many problems can be seen at a glance.
For Internet writers who write on the fly and are all tentacle monsters, what they need more is feedback from readers.
The summary at the end of the paper is such a good platform for feedback and communication.
This made me sigh again that this chapter is really a good thing.
[Enter the problem analysis link below]
To be honest, I revised this volume many times.
Before publishing the book, I made at least three major revisions and countless minor revisions. I can’t even count.
To be honest, I am really an untalented writer.
But when it came to revising articles, I was very able to endure hardships and was very willing to work hard. I think this is also the reason why Fuji Dao was able to achieve a little bit of success in the end.
As for this novel, I was quite confident before I published it.
After I posted it, I found that there were still a lot of problems, so I revised the previous content while posting a new chapter.
There are three main problems. The first is that the pace is too slow.
In order to adapt to the trend of asxs readers who increasingly like to experience the new world through the eyes of the protagonist, I wrote too much and too detailed experience content at the beginning, which seriously slowed down the progress of the novel's plot.
My solution to this problem was to revise it eight times, deleting chapters from thirty-nine to seventeen, and then deleting twenty-two chapters. After the first volume was revised, it changed from 90,000 words to 40,000 words.
Multiple words. I think the rhythm is much better.
In the following chapters, I also made a lot of deletions. Including many manuscripts that were written but not sent out, I probably deleted more than 30,000 words.
Finally, the overall rhythm is not too slow.
The world view of the entire novel will be fully unfolded in the second and third volumes. This is the time to test the quality of this book.
The second problem is that there are many places where memes are forcedly used, which can easily make readers confused.
This problem is mainly concentrated in the five chapters I deleted. Deleting them will make them gone.
At the same time, for the subsequent chapters, I will check them again and again before publishing each time, and try to delete all the places that forcefully use jokes.
This kind of problem of forced use of memes has never occurred to me before, but this time it appeared in the new book——
So, this chapter says it is really a place that people both love and hate.
It makes every author want to write something interesting as much as possible, so that readers will be full of the desire to complain, so all kinds of bad jokes and bad jokes appear unconsciously. I have to restrain myself.
The third problem is that there are too many parts with supporting characters as the main perspective. Although it deepens the character's perspective and details the inner world, it seriously slows down the progress of the main line (this is consistent with the first problem). So in the last few chapters
In this revision, I deleted all the perspectives of Li Shimin, Liu Shilong, Yuwen Jianxue, and Tian Deping, and changed them into extras, so I won’t go into details. Sometimes, I want to write about some of my favorite characters so much that my writing inevitably fails.
Too heavy. In fact, spending less pen and ink and portraying better characters is the most effective way.
[About what I am satisfied with]
The first is Wu Ma’s efforts. In the world I describe, Wu Ma is a person who will never give up easily, and will try his best to overcome all difficulties when faced with them.
So even if he is trapped in a secret room, lying on the altar, unable to move, he will do everything possible to survive.
In the first volume, I basically achieved the main characteristics of the dancing horse that I wanted to highlight.
The second is about the portrayal of characters. I tried not to write about paper characters or weak villains, so I wrote a biography for every character who appeared, so that they could have their own stand and their own persistence.
Judging from the first volume, I am basically satisfied with these three characters: Tian Deping, Gao Junya, and Wang Wei.
The three people belong to the counter-insurgency camp at the same time. They are together in most scenes, have the same goals, and do the same things. If there are no particularly clear attitudes and distinct personalities, it is easy to write them as three paper people and prop people.
In fact, in the history books, I think Wang Wei and Gao Junya almost appear with the same image except for their different names.
I feel like I at least gave them a little bit of flesh and blood.
I believe that the best novels must be battles where the enemy and we are evenly matched, and even the enemy is stronger. So I set a very difficult start for Wu Ma, and also set up a difficult enough opponent like Tian Deping.
I would like to talk about Tian Deping in particular. At the beginning of the novel, Tian Deping actually had only one purpose in doing all this, which was to occupy the body of the dancing horse and rob him of his spiritual objects. He was very greedy and longed for powerful power.
After finishing the first volume, I looked back at this character and felt that he had no life, no flesh and blood, and was too pale.
So, I spent a long time thinking about it and made major revisions to two drafts, and finally we have the Tian Deping you see now.
Just in time, I took advantage of the opportunity of plump Tian Deping to let Qingxia appear in advance, which also paved the way for the main conflict in the third volume. This is an aspect that I am very satisfied with.
For the rest, Liu Shilong is the character who drives the plot, and I tried my best to make him interesting.
It's a pity that due to drastic cuts later on, many of the details of the characters were deleted. Although the pace became faster, the characters became thinner. As the saying goes, there are gains and losses.
The third satisfactory part is that from the beginning to the end of this volume, I basically strictly followed the established outline. I used all the foreshadowing in the volume, all the foreshadowings were drawn out, and all the pitfalls were buried. One link followed the other.
, one plot within another plot, which can be regarded as forming a relatively good closure in the volume.
The final climax was a bit weak, but I was satisfied with the deaths of Yan Xiaoliu, Gao Junya, and Wang Wei.
As for the worldview, I decisively chose to introduce it step by step. As a result, after the first volume was written, the worldview was only the tip of the iceberg. This would probably affect the number of subscribers of this book, which was a punishment for my stubbornness.
In addition, many of the characters in this book borrowed prototypes from history, but they have enriched a lot of the author's secondary creations, so no one will believe them to be true.
For the final ending, I prepared two perspectives.
One is the perspective of the dancing horse. The other is the perspective of Yuwen Jianxue.
If you use the perspective of the dancing horse, the final effect should be that under the clear moonlight, the dancing horse looks at the world with curious eyes, saying goodbye to the scars of the past, saying goodbye to the struggle in the secret room, and looking forward to this new world, looking forward to it
A fresh start for myself (Note: I later took the time to add this perspective, but from another perspective).
If I use Yuwen Jianxue's perspective, then what I want to express is, on the one hand, Yuwen Jianxue's hazy emotion when he looks back on this night a few years later.
On the other hand, it was the dancing horse in her eyes, the strange people in her eyes, and the beginning of her curiosity in that scene.
I weighed it for a long time, even overturned a draft, and finally chose Yuwen Jianxue's perspective. I think this works better.
This is all for the first volume.
This volume is the beginning of Wu Ma in the fantasy Sui and Tang Dynasties. It embodies his will to never admit defeat and never give up. It is the part that has not been completely severed from the old world and is the prelude to his integration into the new world.
After finishing this curl, I plan to spend two days sorting out the details of the second and third volumes.
In these two days, I will not publish new chapters. However, I will adapt some of the very slow-paced content that was originally deleted into extra chapters of the novel.
Some of the extras can complete the inner thoughts of the people involved at the time, some can be used as parts to complete the world view, and some can be used as NG clips. I personally think it is quite interesting.
Book lovers who don't like the extra parts can just browse the table of contents and skip it.