Zhu Ting nodded shyly, bit her lip and said, "Take a look." After saying that, she turned around and returned to the small office.
Du Fei found it interesting, took a sip of hot tea, and opened Miss Zhu Ting's manuscript...
At this time, Zhu Ting was in the small office. From time to time she stretched her neck and looked out, and found Du Fei reading her manuscript. Her heart was beating for no reason, as if she was back in her childhood waiting for the teacher to mark the papers after taking an exam.
Section Chief Qian, who was sitting opposite, was still holding his copy of "Arsenal of Immortal Machines" and his glasses were placed under the bridge of his nose. When he saw Zhu Ting's appearance, he joked, "Girl, have you recruited that guy Du Fei again?"
Zhu Ting was stunned, glared at Section Chief Qian and said, "What do you mean by recruiting him! Old comrade, please pay attention to your wording."
Section Chief Qian laughed and said, "Girl, are you serious, do you have a crush on our Xiao Du?"
Zhu Ting suddenly blushed and said, "Comrade Qian, what are you talking about!"
Section Chief Qian curled his lips and said deliberately, "There is no best! Let me tell you, girl, pretty boys like Xiao Du don't have any good intentions..."
"Comrade Lao Qian! I'm going to get angry if you keep talking nonsense." Zhu Ting tried her best to keep her face straight, but the blush on her cheeks revealed her obvious lack of confidence.
"Alas~" Section Chief Qian sighed, imitating the tone of Peking Opera's recitation, "Oh~loyal words are hard on the ears~ah!"
Zhu Ting glared at him again.
Outside, Du Fei read several pages at a glance.
Needless to say, Zhu Ting's pen handwriting is really beautiful! The structure of the font has just been improved, the strokes are sharp and full of charm.
In comparison, Du Fei's handwriting is much worse.
By the time it was almost lunch break, Du Fei had already read most of what Zhu Ting had written.
As someone got up and walked out, he also raised his head and stretched.
Zhu Ting came out of the small office and came up to her and said, "Hey~ what do you think?"
Du Fei nodded and said, "Sister Zhu, your hard-pen calligraphy is really good!"
"Who asked you this..." Zhu Ting was stunned for a moment, then reacted immediately, her beautiful red eyes widened, and she said angrily, "Speak to me properly, don't be so arrogant, is my writing really that bad?"
Du Fei consoled him, "It's actually not that bad. At least the punctuation marks are used correctly."
Zhu Ting was immediately furious, clenching her fists tightly, wanting to go up and beat Du Fei into a mess.
However, she still had to maintain her leadership image in the workplace, but she still gritted her teeth and said, "Du Fei, you'd better explain it to me! What's wrong with mine? Otherwise..."
Du Fei instantly felt a murderous aura, but he was very serious and curled his lips and said, "This is what you asked me to say, don't cry later."
Zhu Ting took a deep breath and resisted the urge to strangle Du Fei. "You say it!"
As a literary young woman who graduated from Yan University, this bastard in front of me actually questioned her literary dream!
It is unbearable!
Du Fei was not in a hurry to eat, so he had time to say, "First of all, hero, what kind of unlucky name is this? Zhan Taiming, why not just call him Zhan Taiming? Why do you want to use such an uncommon compound name? In addition to increasing readers' interest,
What's the use of obstacles? I also explained to people many times in the book that my surname is Zhan Tai, not Zhan. Isn't it embarrassing?"
Zhu Ting pursed her lips.
Du Fei added, "And that murderer, why did he make such a low-level mistake right from the start? It's not like an experienced enemy spy at all. Will the protagonist's defeat of this kind of enemy show that the protagonist is powerful?"
Zhu Ting was a little speechless. Du Fei continued, "Think of Professor Moriarty in Sherlock Holmes! Powerful, sinister, cunning, and fierce! That is the temperament that a villain boss should have."
At this time, Zhu Ting could no longer hold her little fist, and she asked without confidence, "Is it really that bad?"
Seeing her pitiful look, Du Fei couldn't bear it, so he calmly said, "Sister Zhu, be more confident and remove the '?'."
Zhu Ting blinked and then realized, "You...are so angry with me!" She reached out and grabbed the notebook on Du Fei's table.
Du Fei quickly held it down and said with a smile, "Hey~Hey~Sister Zhu, please calm down!"
But inadvertently, my elbow bumped against something, and it felt soft~
Zhu Ting took a step back, her face turned red instantly, and she didn't care about grabbing the book. She pouted, stamped her feet, turned around and ran away.
Du Fei reached out and touched his elbow, thinking to himself, "Holy shit, it's really unfathomable!"
After thinking for a while, he picked up the manuscript paper on the table and followed it out.
Du Fei took a few steps into the courtyard and caught up with Zhu Ting. He chuckled and said, "Sister, why are you really angry?"
Zhu Ting's cheeks were still slightly red. She glared at him. When she saw the manuscript paper, she stopped and stretched out her hand and said, "Give it back to me!"
Du Fei said, "Don't worry! I haven't finished reading it yet!"
Zhu Ting snorted and said, "What else are you looking at? You've made me worthless."
Du Fei said, "Why is it worthless? The description of the scene is really good! From far to near, from near to far, it is very picturesque, and the vocabulary is also quite gorgeous. He is worthy of being a top student at Yanda."
Zhu Ting's eyelids were drooped, with a "you lied" expression on her face.
Du Fei smiled and said, "Don't stand here, let's talk as we walk."
After saying that, he didn't care whether Zhu Ting agreed or not, and walked forward on his own.
Zhu Ting stood awkwardly for a second and then followed her.
Du Fei waited for her to come to the side, stopped teasing Menzi, and said seriously, "Sister Zhu, is this your first time writing?"
Zhu Ting said "hmm".
"Actually, as a beginner, these shortcomings in you are nothing." Du Fei continued, "If you can get into Yanda, you must be very good at composition, and you should also be good at poetry and prose. But it is different from these.
The essence is to tell a story. As long as the story is told clearly and wonderfully, the words don’t need to be gorgeous, and it can still become an excellent book.”
Zhu Ting pouted and asked, "Tell me, how can we tell the story well?"
Du Fei said concisely and comprehensively, "If you want to be fascinating, you must have ups and downs."
"Ups and downs?" Zhu Ting frowned.
Du Fei paused, waiting for her to think about it.
Zhu Ting thought for a while and said, "You mean the plot has twists and turns?"
Du Fei nodded, "It's like the scene in "The Golden Lotus" when Ximen Qing marries Li Ping'er..."
"Bah~" Zhu Ting's cheeks turned red immediately, and she raised her hand and slapped Du Fei's arm hard, "You don't learn well! What a useless book to read."
Du Fei curled his lips and thought, "You haven't read it and you know it's a bad book?"
However, I also realized that I was a little bit arrogant, so I changed my words and said, "Then the three fights with the Bone Demon in "Journey to the West" are typical ups and downs."
Zhu Ting fell into thinking.
Du Fei said, "Go back and take a good look at Three Strikes of Bone Demons, and change your plot according to that model, and see if it's much better."
Zhu Ting had listened and nodded silently. Zhu Ting nodded shyly, bit her lip and said, "Take a look." After that, she turned around and returned to the small office.
Du Fei found it interesting, took a sip of hot tea, and opened Miss Zhu Ting's manuscript...
At this time, Zhu Ting was in the small office. From time to time she stretched her neck and looked out, and found Du Fei reading her manuscript. Her heart was beating for no reason, as if she was back in her childhood waiting for the teacher to mark the papers after taking an exam.
Section Chief Qian, who was sitting opposite, was still holding his copy of "Arsenal of Immortal Machines" and his glasses were placed under the bridge of his nose. When he saw Zhu Ting's appearance, he joked, "Girl, have you recruited that guy Du Fei again?"
Zhu Ting was stunned, glared at Section Chief Qian and said, "What do you mean by recruiting him! Old comrade, please pay attention to your wording."
Section Chief Qian laughed and said, "Girl, are you serious, do you have a crush on our Xiao Du?"
Zhu Ting suddenly blushed and said, "Comrade Qian, what are you talking about!"
Section Chief Qian curled his lips and said deliberately, "There is no best! Let me tell you, girl, pretty boys like Xiao Du don't have any good intentions..."
"Comrade Lao Qian! I'm going to get angry if you keep talking nonsense." Zhu Ting tried her best to keep her face straight, but the blush on her cheeks revealed her obvious lack of confidence.
"Alas~" Section Chief Qian sighed, imitating the tone of Peking Opera's recitation, "Oh~loyal words are hard on the ears~ah!"
Zhu Ting glared at him again.
Outside, Du Fei read several pages at a glance.
Needless to say, Zhu Ting's pen handwriting is really beautiful! The structure of the font has just been improved, the strokes are sharp and full of charm.
In comparison, Du Fei's handwriting is much worse.
By the time it was almost lunch break, Du Fei had already read most of what Zhu Ting had written.
As someone got up and walked out, he also raised his head and stretched.
Zhu Ting came out of the small office and came up to her and said, "Hey~ what do you think?"
Du Fei nodded and said, "Sister Zhu, your hard-pen calligraphy is really good!"
"Who asked you this..." Zhu Ting was stunned for a moment, then reacted immediately, her beautiful red eyes widened, and she said angrily, "Speak to me properly, don't be so arrogant, is my writing really that bad?"
Du Fei consoled him, "It's actually not that bad. At least the punctuation marks are used correctly."
Zhu Ting was immediately furious, clenching her fists tightly, wanting to go up and beat Du Fei into a mess.
However, she still had to maintain her leadership image in the workplace, but she still gritted her teeth and said, "Du Fei, you'd better explain it to me! What's wrong with mine? Otherwise..."
Du Fei instantly felt a murderous aura, but he was very serious and curled his lips and said, "This is what you asked me to say, don't cry later."
Zhu Ting took a deep breath and resisted the urge to strangle Du Fei. "You say it!"
As a literary young woman who graduated from Yan University, this bastard in front of me actually questioned her literary dream!
It is unbearable!
Du Fei was not in a hurry to eat, so he had time to say, "First of all, hero, what kind of unlucky name is this? Zhan Taiming, why not just call him Zhan Taiming? Why do you want to use such an uncommon compound name? In addition to increasing readers' interest,
What's the use of obstacles? I also explained to people many times in the book that my surname is Zhan Tai, not Zhan. Isn't it embarrassing?"
Zhu Ting pursed her lips.
Du Fei added, "And that murderer, why did he make such a low-level mistake right from the start? It's not like an experienced enemy spy at all. Will the protagonist's defeat of this kind of enemy show that the protagonist is powerful?"
Zhu Ting was a little speechless. Du Fei continued, "Think of Professor Moriarty in Sherlock Holmes! Powerful, sinister, cunning, and fierce! That is the temperament that a villain boss should have."
At this time, Zhu Ting could no longer hold her little fist, and she asked without confidence, "Is it really that bad?"
Seeing her pitiful look, Du Fei couldn't bear it, so he calmly said, "Sister Zhu, be more confident and remove the '?'."
Zhu Ting blinked and then realized, "You...are so angry with me!" She reached out and grabbed the notebook on Du Fei's table.
Du Fei quickly held it down and said with a smile, "Hey~Hey~Sister Zhu, please calm down!"
But inadvertently, my elbow bumped against something, and it felt soft~
Zhu Ting took a step back, her face turned red instantly, and she didn't care about grabbing the book. She pouted, stamped her feet, turned around and ran away.
Du Fei reached out and touched his elbow, thinking to himself, "Holy shit, it's really unfathomable!"
After thinking for a while, he picked up the manuscript paper on the table and followed it out.
Du Fei took a few steps into the courtyard and caught up with Zhu Ting. He chuckled and said, "Sister, why are you really angry?"
Zhu Ting's cheeks were still slightly red. She glared at him. When she saw the manuscript paper, she stopped and stretched out her hand and said, "Give it back to me!"
Du Fei said, "Don't worry! I haven't finished reading it yet!"
Zhu Ting snorted and said, "What else are you looking at? You've made me worthless."
Du Fei said, "Why is it worthless? The description of the scene is really good! From far to near, from near to far, it is very picturesque, and the vocabulary is also quite gorgeous. He is worthy of being a top student at Yanda."
Zhu Ting's eyelids were drooped, with a "you lied" expression on her face.
Du Fei smiled and said, "Don't stand here, let's talk as we walk."
After saying that, he didn't care whether Zhu Ting agreed or not, and walked forward on his own.
Zhu Ting stood awkwardly for a second and then followed her.
Du Fei waited for her to come to the side, stopped teasing Menzi, and said seriously, "Sister Zhu, is this your first time writing?"
Zhu Ting said "hmm".
"Actually, as a beginner, these shortcomings in you are nothing." Du Fei continued, "If you can get into Yanda, you must be very good at composition, and you should also be good at poetry and prose. But it is different from these.
The essence is to tell a story. As long as the story is told clearly and wonderfully, the words don’t need to be gorgeous, and it can still become an excellent book.”
Zhu Ting pouted and asked, "Tell me, how can we tell the story well?"
Du Fei said concisely and comprehensively, "If you want to be fascinating, you must have ups and downs."
"Ups and downs?" Zhu Ting frowned.
Du Fei paused, waiting for her to think about it.
Zhu Ting thought for a while and said, "You mean the plot has twists and turns?"
Du Fei nodded, "It's like the scene in "The Golden Lotus" when Ximen Qing marries Li Ping'er..."
"Bah~" Zhu Ting's cheeks turned red immediately, and she raised her hand and slapped Du Fei's arm hard, "You don't learn well! What a useless book to read."
Du Fei curled his lips and thought, "You haven't read it and you know it's a bad book?"
However, I also realized that I was a little bit arrogant, so I changed my words and said, "Then the three fights with the Bone Demon in "Journey to the West" are typical ups and downs."
Zhu Ting fell into thinking.
Du Fei said, "Go back and take a good look at Three Strikes of Bone Demons, and change your plot according to that model, and see if it's much better."
Zhu Ting had already listened and nodded silently.