"Huh!" Chen Wen let out a long breath, and then looked at Li Yi with a strange look on his face.
"Did you really write this?" Chen Wen looked at Li Yi suspiciously.
Everyone else also looked curious.
"Ang, what's the problem?" Li Yi asked.
"It's a big problem, okay? I always feel that this doesn't seem to be your handiwork." Chen Wen looked puzzled.
"What do you think?" he asked the others.
Zhou Guo and Lin Yunbin both nodded in agreement and said, "It certainly doesn't look like Director Li's handiwork."
"Okay, I know this script is a bit rough. I'm asking everyone to brainstorm. You can put forward anything you want to say." Li Yi said helplessly.
"Then I'm not polite?" Chen Wen was the first to attack.
Li Yi made a gesture of invitation.
"Ahem, first of all, I think it's the issue of the background timeline. Since you set the background of evacuation of overseas Chinese, the timeline should be in the near future. But in your script, the problem of demolition, first of all, the chaos of forced demolition seems to be
This happened more than ten years ago, right? Now when everyone thinks of demolition, the first thing that comes to their mind is to distribute it!
It can be said that the demolished households are now the object of envy and jealousy of almost countless people, so is this plot arrangement a bit inappropriate?
After all, according to the plot of your story, Leng Feng in it was imprisoned for three years for demolition and beating someone to death, and he was released for another two years, so the total time spent is only five years.
I am not a professional screenwriter, but from the perspective of an ordinary audience, I would think, what age is this, does this kind of thing still exist?"
Everyone else nodded when they heard this.
Li Yi was also a little embarrassed. Not to mention, he was indeed negligent in this matter, mainly because he forgot about the timeline.
First of all, in my memory, this movie was filmed relatively early.
Secondly, more than ten years ago, forced demolition was indeed a very serious problem, so he took it for granted and ignored it.
"Continue!" However, Li Yi did not say anything, but motioned for Chen Wen to continue.
After all, they were here today to find out the problem.
"Actually, I think if this plot is really to be used, then let Leng Feng sit in jail for a few more years. In this way, the timeline can be pushed forward a little bit. It's not a big problem, but there is one more thing.
This is actually quite sensitive. After all, the incident itself is too dark. Of course, I think it will not be difficult for your work to pass the review, so let’s not talk about it for now.
It's still a forced demolition plot. According to your story, the gangsters who forced the demolition came up, took out a handful of black stars and put it on Leng Feng's head.
I don’t know what you think, is this BUG too low-level?
Please, is this in China, not in America, where there is a black star so casually?
Is it okay to have a black star, or is it just used for forced demolition?
Later, Leng Feng grabbed the shit basin and told the police, "Comrade, he has a gun!"
Are the gangsters so awesome? Pointing guns at active-duty soldiers in broad daylight? Confusing right and wrong in front of their faces?
Just go for robbery or kidnapping, and you will die anyway.
What I feel here is: Just like what the gangster said when he pointed a gun at Leng Feng: You really take yourself seriously, right?
I think this is too deliberate. It gives the impression that it is entirely because the intention is to make things bigger first, and then lead to the scene of taking action later. However, I really think this plot is a bit funny and disappointing. Just go out and ask anyone.
People, even in an era when forced demolition incidents occur frequently, when a gun is pulled out and there are so many people, the target is still a soldier. Is this really what you wrote?"
What Chen Wen said made Li Yi feel a little ashamed, but if he thought about it carefully, it was true.
What country is China?
Illegal possession of a gun is a serious crime, and it should be almost, not almost, but absolutely zero tolerance.
As the safest country in the world, China can be said to have a lot to do with the strict control in this area. Ten or twenty years earlier, when there was no such absolute control, it was indeed not so everywhere.
Safe. But what era is it now?
It can be said that the vast majority of people will never touch sharp weapons like firearms in their entire lives. At most, they can only look at them.
The hooligans were indeed very arrogant in the past, but even ten years ago, no one really dared to be so arrogant, so there is indeed something here.
"Does it feel like it's a bit too Hollywood?" Zhou Guo couldn't help but agree.
Li Yi suddenly realized that, not to mention, the plot of the original version was indeed copied from Hollywood in many aspects.
Drawing a gun at every turn is almost impossible in China.
Unless they are extremely vicious criminals, no one would dare to do this.
"Continue!" Li Yi took a pen and wrote it down in his notebook.
"As for the bullet that killed Long Xiaoyun, you didn't explain why Leng Feng went to Africa to find the source of the bullet. Why didn't he go to America, Europe or other places? It feels like it was purely to connect with the overseas Chinese incident in Africa.
Did you deliberately set out to find bullets in Africa?"
"Another question of perspective, Leng Feng is a soldier, or at least once was a soldier, but Tudou steals the Maotai liquor in the store. What you wrote here is that Leng Feng smiled after seeing it. Why do I feel that he seems to be...
Encourage this behavior?
Is this retaliation for Qian Bida’s $300 short payment?
But this is an act of stealing. Isn’t it too strange? Encourage theft? Instead of strictly stopping it? Even a look would be good.”
Watching Chen Wen turn into a troll and spray Li Yi with blood, it was the first time for everyone to see him, so they found it quite interesting.
But I have to say that if you really dig into this script, there are indeed big problems.
However, Chen Wen was not over yet. He seemed to be enjoying the rant and continued: "If the first part is just a detail, then the captain and Ambassador Fan are quarreling in the second part.
The captain emphasized that combatants were prohibited from entering the combat zone, and then suddenly said that one person must complete the mission alone.
I especially don’t understand why it can’t be 2 people? Or a group?
Is it just to highlight personal heroism?
"One person" must stand up and apply to complete the "impossible" task of entering the war zone to spread overseas Chinese.
Then, Leng Feng set off in a brand-new car with “no allies and no weapons”?
They didn't even give him a bulletproof vest? They only gave him a pair of sunglasses? What if they really gave him guns and ammunition? Can the United Nations follow along to supervise? Our warships, if they voluntarily return to the war zone, they will bring back
Why are our compatriots so picky? Is it to highlight the unarmed strength of Wolf Warrior? But he was also given a satellite phone, because later you said that Leng Feng used a satellite phone to communicate with the captain. Well, isn’t that a satellite phone?
More sensitive?”
"More, more"
Chen Wen turned into a troll almost all the time, catching Li Yi and spraying him wildly.
Li Yi couldn't help but wonder, is it really so full of flaws?
He suspected that Chen Wen was deliberately looking for an opportunity to slander him?
