One or Two Winds in the World: "Using the manuscript again? Are you kidding me? Didn't I send it to you fifty minutes ago? Brother, are you urging the manuscript every fifty minutes? That's too much. If you keep doing this, I will block you!"
One or Two Winds in the World: "Speaking of which, you haven't given me any advice after reading it. How is the writing? Can you comment?"
Xia Sheng didn't reply because he didn't know how to give a better evaluation, so he started looking for help and joined the male channel editor group to ask what they thought of the first draft of "The Chronicle of Sword and Law".
"Let's talk about it. Don't think about Yiliangfeng's platinum status. His platinum status came from a female channel. Now he has switched to a male channel. He has basically no readers on this channel. You just think he is a newcomer to the Internet.
Let me evaluate this opening chapter of "Sword and Law" and tell me more."
Fifty thousand words is just the beginning of an online article. Given the fast pace of the market that is visible to the naked eye, this opening is even smaller.
After an editor has read the first three chapters of a novel and 10,000 words, and then carefully looks at the title and introduction, he can basically decide whether the novel can be signed, which will most likely affect the life or death of the work.
"Chronicle of Sword and Law", is there any problem with the title? It directly points out the subject matter, "Sword and Law", concisely and to the point, "Chronicle" brings a sense of seriousness and orthodoxy to the work.
Although there are no explosive points, there are also no poisonous points. It seems that it is taking a serious approach. Basically, no one will not click on this work just because of the title, and that is enough.
If you choose a strange title, you may attract a lot of people's attention, but it will also offend a lot of people and indirectly lose some readers.
Looking at the introduction of "Sword and Law", it clearly describes the type of story this book is, "traveling through other worlds", "big scenes", and points out the protagonist's golden finger "I have dreamed of it countless times"
"See it", you should know a lot about this alien world.
And with smooth and beautiful words, it tells readers the background of this alien world, materialism and idealism, magic energy and science, divine power and royal power, empire and Kangmi...
Che, a hodgepodge? Can you write it well?
The reader is dubious and has a slightly heightened sense of expectation.
Afterwards, the protagonist ‘I’ Kang made an impassioned speech, including many ambitious goals in the book, and also explained the dilemma at the beginning.
'But before that, I have to sail a lonely boat on the sea of Hades to survive...'
Yo, trying to survive in a boat on the sea? Are you going to die?
The reader's sense of expectation has increased again, and he subconsciously wants to see how he survives.
The last sentence of the introduction: "This is a story that happened 20 billion light years away. This is a chronicle of the real existence of a fantasy planet."
What you said is true. Why are you bragging? The writing is not good and I will blow you to death!
This sentence will once again raise the expectations of readers. I believe that many people will click on the table of contents of this book and officially start
As for the main text, is the beginning of "Chronicle of Sword and Law" qualified?
(Editor-in-Chief of Team 2) Baodao: "This is a record-breaking one. In the first sixteen chapters, let alone the female protagonist, there is no real intelligent creature except the protagonist!"
(Editor-in-Chief of Team 6) Peanut: "Nonsense, the Gengen dolphin who made friends with the protagonist is intelligent and has a simple civilization. Didn't you pay attention?"
(Chief Editor of Group 2) Baodao: "Without words, there is no civilization. But I am not saying this in a derogatory sense. Although there are no supporting characters, the starting elements are complete. Goldfinger, the world view, and the protagonist's image are all revealed, and countless arrangements are made around survival.
The small conflict was resolved smoothly in the end, and logging into the island led to the next plot... without any problems."
(Editor-in-Chief of Team 2) Baodao: "I have been thinking about what kind of story Yiliangfeng will use as a starting point, which can explain the huge world background more naturally and arouse readers' emotions to generate expectations, instead of being distracted by complicated backgrounds and difficult-to-explain words.
The name of the person persuades you to quit. For example, "Lord of the Mystery" is an opening that has been proven to be effective. The protagonist is in the "center of the storm", commits suicide and comes back to life. The main plot is laid through the diary, leaving a sense of suspense.
It attracts readers to read on. But there are still barriers, the setting is very rigid, the environment and life details are too lengthy, and other shortcomings are inevitable in order to make the world more real. I thought Yiliangfeng would use something similar like this
The method and writing style are unexpected and completely different and stunning. To sum up the beginning in one sentence, the monk's house - wonderful!"
(Editor-in-Chief of Team 9) yy: "The protagonist of "Sword and Law" is in a desperate situation at the beginning, so it has a faster pace and can better arouse the readers' emotions. Through celestial bodies, physical rules, different marine creatures and the sky that are very different from reality,
Birds and various natural wonders bring readers into the book. The story has a tight rhythm, with rushes and slowdowns, and the world setting leaves no trace. Facing the strange natural conditions and magical creatures in the alien world, it is easy to be in people's hearts.
It leaves a strong sense of suspense, which makes people want to continue reading to see what new things the author can come up with, thus creating the expectation of following the protagonist to continue exploring the world in the book... The shortcoming is that it may be a bit of a foreshadowing.
It’s long. I didn’t think it was long when I read it. After reading it, I suddenly realized that it’s 50,000 words, and it seems like I’ve just entered the main plot! This progress is a bit slow... You should quickly let Yiliang Feng write it!
"
(Chief Editor of Group 7) December: "The writing is concise and razor-like, which is rare in online articles. It is also different from the writing style before Yiliangfeng. When I saw the clip of the protagonist fishing while controlling the sail to escape from the storm, I thought
I read the magical version of "The Old Man and the Sea". Then I discovered that the writing style of "The Sword and the Law" is different from that of online writing and traditional literature. There is very little rhetoric in the characters' language, only the scenery and creatures of other worlds.
Only when I feel like I am willing to show my gorgeous brushstrokes, it reads like a poem, and the look and feel is doubled when combined with the illustrations!”
(Editor-in-Chief of Group 1) Lemon: "(Picture) I like this one the best. The dark moon rises in the dark night, and the cold stars quietly appear in the sky. The storm under the ice clouds not far behind the protagonist is brewing huge waves. He is preparing to go back.
He ran for his life in the same direction, but due to exhaustion, he hallucinated. In the night sky, he saw a nebula that looked like a Milky Way galaxy. He immediately decided to drive a lone boat across the waves in the direction of the nebula, roaring: "Fuck you, I want to go home."
...It’s funny but also a little sad, and with this painting that faithfully represents the spectacular scene at that time, it’s full of artistic content!”
(Editor-in-Chief of Group 6) Peanut: “Did Yiliangfeng paint these paintings himself or did he hire someone to paint them?”
Shengxia: "He drew it himself. But can you tell me more about the shortcomings? He is waiting for my review and evaluation."
There was silence in the group for a moment.
Baodao (Editor-in-Chief of Group 2) said: "With many years of experience, I really feel that this book has an aura of 'asking for the highest', so I can only give one evaluation: Duo Ma!"
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"I know, I'm typing it up. I'll try to save a hundred thousand words of the manuscript and publish it."
In fact, Li Peifeng knew how many strokes there were in the word "diligence" without any prompting from the editor. When he called me after reviewing the manuscript in midsummer, he was sitting in front of the computer, typing words, and occasionally pausing to formulate ideas.
It has been seven days since Baoyu Community was banned. If nothing unexpected happens, there will be at least seven more days.
Halfway through the lockdown period, many residents in the community couldn't bear the anguish of being grounded, so they signed up to be volunteers one after another. Some with a spirit of dedication were not excluded, but mostly because they felt uncomfortable after being stuck at home for so long and wanted to take advantage of the convenience of work.
Walking around the building.
Therefore, there are more and more volunteers in Baoyu Community, but the workload is only so much. Everyone is rushing to do it, and Li Peifeng has more time to code in the attic of his home.
Moreover, except for necessary meals, he basically didn't go downstairs, and the time he spent meeting the three girls was reduced, and they got along more harmoniously, unlike the frequent turbulence or constant cold wars like in the first few days.
Li Peifeng became more focused and focused on his creation. When he was short of inspiration, he chatted with three girls about the things in his dreams at the dinner table, and his ideas gradually became clearer.
In this state, Li Peifeng felt that being banned might not be without any benefit.
It was five o'clock today, and Li Peifeng was dizzy as he was writing. When he looked at the time, he went downstairs to prepare for cooking as usual, but found that Wu Wenyue and Huang Tianxuan were busy in the kitchen, and Zhao Qingge was sitting at the dining table, picking vegetables.
"You don't need me to cook today?"
Li Peifeng asked casually, Wu Wenyue waved her hand: "You go ahead and code, Sister Tianxuan and I will speculate."
Hey, I feel comfortable.
I can live a life like this, surrounded by beautiful people at home and having my own food to eat.
Li Peifeng smiled inwardly, looked around, then sat next to Zhao Qingge and helped her pick vegetables.
After dinner, everyone put away the tableware together. Li Peifeng finished washing the dishes and planned to go upstairs. Just as he sat down in front of the computer, his cell phone rang.
A three-person WeChat group called [Three Auspicious Treasures] popped up on the screen, and Xu Manying initiated a video call.
The members of the group include Li Peifeng, Wu Wenyue, and Xu Manying. This is the xth group formed by President Xu in recent days after the three groups such as "Happy Family" and "Happy Family" were disbanded one after another.
A three-person WeChat group.
The function of the group is for three people to chat or use phone
sex……
As for the group name, it was naturally Xu Manning who came up with it. Li Peifeng suggested changing it several times but gave up without getting approval.
"Man Ning?!"
"You're back! Didn't you say two days ago that you might have to return to Beijing a few days later?"
During the video call, Wu Wenyue and Li Peifeng were in their respective bedrooms, both looking a little surprised, because Xu Maning seemed to have made the call to them outside the Capital Airport.
"The matter was resolved successfully, and I will return as scheduled!" Xu Manying's tired face was filled with a happy smile, but Wu Wenyue's face was hesitant: "But do you also want to..."
Xu Manying's face immediately dropped: "Yes, like you, I also need to be quarantined at home!"
The two laughed when they heard the words, and each offered words of comfort.
Even if Xu Manying returns to Beijing, she will not be able to visit them in Baoyu Community, which is under lockdown, because she will also have to undergo a fourteen-day quarantine. The three of them will not be able to meet each other until Baoyu Community is unblocked.
Therefore, Miss Xu's return did not affect the lives of the four people in Baoyu Community.
The days went by peacefully, and occasionally He Yimeng would send Li Peifeng a WeChat message, saying, "Yesterday, I was an emotional trash can for another day. I am under great psychological pressure." Come over quickly. Someone gave me a box of soda. Do you want it?
want?'
Li Peifeng’s answer is of course no!
At the beginning of the ban, supplies were relatively scarce. For the sake of his family and the happy life of the three women, he had no choice but to exchange labor for things and get some fruits from He Yimeng.
Now that the lockdown is over halfway through, the community has caught up with supplies, often giving out snacks, fruits and the like. No household in the community is short of surplus food. Naturally, Li Peifeng will not sell his body for mere supplies!
Although the things He Yimeng gave him before were all converted into amounts by the system, which was helpful for obtaining lottery opportunities, Li Peifeng was rich and not promiscuous, and Li Peifeng was mighty and unyielding, so he was definitely not bewitched by He Yimeng...
"No, keep it for yourself and drink it!"
Li Peifeng couldn't help but type one more line: "It's broad daylight and I just had breakfast. Please be more restrained, even if it's at night?!"
He Yimeng: "I'm looking for you at night, and you can't even come out. The fifth round of supplies will arrive shortly, and volunteers from all groups will come out to work, so you can have an excuse."
Li Peifeng: "I'm not going. I have to go home and code after work."
He Yimeng: "Just chatting, nothing else. Yesterday I adopted a ragdoll cat from a visitor. It's very well-behaved. It's only a few months old. Why don't you come and take a look?"
Li Peifeng: "Consultants can't accept gifts from clients. Is this okay for you?"
He Yimeng: "It's not a gift. Come over here and I'll explain it to you in detail."
"Ding~"
The WeChat group of volunteers in the community called for people to gather again. Li Peifeng replied, "Let's meet at the property management office." He quickly changed his clothes and went downstairs to work.
In twenty minutes, Wuyangyang's group of volunteers unloaded the supplies from the truck and delivered them to residents in each unit building.
With more people, we have greater strength, and everyone is much more experienced and proficient than before. This kind of routine work can be done very quickly.
Li Peifeng finished his work and took his share to go home, but when he passed by Building 1, he saw He Yimeng greeting him.
This chapter is not over yet, please click on the next page to continue reading the exciting content! "Let's go to my house."
Li Peifeng stopped, thinking about the WeChat chat with the other party just now, and frowned: "What kind of cat do you have in this situation? Is it free? Do you have cat food, litter or anything?"
"Then you don't have to worry." He Yi Meng said with a smile in his eyes, "I just want to ask, don't you want to pet the cat?"
Most people can't control their love for cats, such furry little animals, especially the ragdoll cat known as the fairy among cats and whose appearance is responsible for its good looks!
It is strange to say that since ancient times, both domestic and foreign literati have a unique preference for cats. There are countless senior cat lovers who are also writers. For example, Hemingway, Borges, Kerouac
, Hermann Hesse, etc. Qian Zhongshu and Lin Huiyin also had conflicts because of fights between their own cats.
Nowadays, there are not many online writers who keep cats. Perhaps it is because of cats’ aloof, arrogant but naturally cute personality that many literary and artistic creators have found resonance or inspiration in cats.
Li Peifeng originally wanted to raise one, but after thinking about it again, it was too troublesome. He thought that small pets like cats and dogs were always other people's cute pets, and his own was just a feces-making machine...
"Just chatting and looking at cats?"
Li Peifeng was a little moved, but he was obviously worried. After all, Wu Wenyue and the others were in the same community. If he frequently communicated with He Yimeng, sooner or later the secret would be revealed, and then he would be in trouble again.
"Love will come or not."
He Yimeng rolled his eyes, seemed too lazy to speak, turned around and left.
"Then take a look at the cat, pet it for a while and then I'll leave."
Li Peifeng thought for a moment and decided to follow up.
In a dozen steps, the two entered the corridor and arrived at He Yimeng's home.
"Pa~"
Li Peifeng put down the supply box in his hand, looked around the unchanged living room, and suddenly felt something was wrong.
"Where's the cat? There's not even a cat food bowl. Where did you raise it?"
He Yimeng also put down the supplies in her hands, shook her head slightly, took off her mask, her white hair was floating gently, she stared at Li Peifeng with a smile, and softly said: "Meow~"
Delicate and soft.
Li Peifeng's expression was stiff, as if he had touched a ten-amp switch socket, and his eyebrows were twitching: "Mengmeng, what the hell are you doing..."
He understood, where is the cat? Or maybe the woman in front of him is a cat?!
He Yimeng smiled even more and walked closer to Li Peifeng. His eyes were shining with hot and thin light. He put the fingers of his hands on his lips as if they were the whiskers of a cat. Then he puffed his mouth and made a cute gesture: "Meow? Meow! Meow!"
~”
"..."
Seeing that Li Peifeng was motionless, He Yimeng was a little dissatisfied. She reached out and gently brushed his face with her fingertips, and ordered: "Hurry up, pet the cat, meow~~"
This chapter has been completed!